A Different Perspective (A Trimeric)

A new landscape, hills not seen before,
swathes of open unexpected sky,
houses stoned in unfamiliar saffron,
concrete blocks of stain and oil with wire barbed to scratch.

Swathes of open unexpected sky,
unknown streams that turn and tumble
with nibbling ducks, or rusting tins of special brew.

Houses stoned in unfamiliar saffron,
lanes of tasteful postcard thatch and dry stone walls, or
saddened streets that slouch and scowl.

Concrete blocks of stain and oil with wire barbed to scratch.
Yet hear the curtain of bright song as birds keep faith –
Untroubled by the view.

Whilst visiting Wiltshire we have walked around pretty thatched cottage-filled villages with idyllic gardens and quiet grassy banks, and also found ourselves in weed-guttered roads, lined with depressing flat-faced buildings and ugly factories. Yet, everywhere the constant sound of birdsong – a bush is a bush, a tree is a tree, life is life.

Grace is on duty at the dVerse Poets Pub and has invited us to try our hands at a Trimeric:

The rules are pretty simple:

  1. Trimeric has 4 stanzas
  2. The first stanza has 4 lines
  3. The other three stanzas have 3 lines each
  4. The first line of each stanza is a refrain of the corresponding line in the first stanza (so 2nd stanza starts with the second line, third stanza starts with the third line, etc.).
  5. The sequence of lines, then, is abcd, b – -, c – -, d – -.

Note: No other rules on line length, meter, or rhyme.

See the site for details at: https://dversepoets.com/2021/06/17/poetry-form-trimeric/ and read some wonderful responses.

19 thoughts on “A Different Perspective (A Trimeric)

  1. This is incredibly evocative! Especially like; “Houses stoned in unfamiliar saffron, lanes of tasteful postcard thatch and dry stone walls, or saddened streets that slouch and scowl.”💝💝

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  2. I love how this line shines through with all the depressing concrete blocks of stain and oil :

    Yet hear the curtain of bright song as birds keep faith –

    Hopeful trimeric Marion! Thanks for joining in.

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  3. Thank you Dora. I realise birdsong is creeping into a few of my poems recently – their chorus seems more evident this year.

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