Each turn winds us closer,
Each spent leaf flicked from a branch,
Each autumn gust and moan,
Each buffeted swooping flock.
Until winter seeps again, coal smoky,
Over the step, under the lintel, along the scuffed boards,
And coats our hearths with its ash.
Sarah is on duty at the d’Verse Poets Pub and invites us to write a quadrille, including the word ‘ash’. Take a look at her post and the creative results at :https://dversepoets.com/2021/10/18/22981/
Marion ~ you know what I like about this? You sort of turned winter on its head by focusing on the ash instead of the whiteness of the snow!
❤
David
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Thank you David. ❤
In my experience, winter is not like the picture on a Christmas card.
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Snow as the ash of winter–how quickly it can turn grey. Seasonal color seems full of life and fire but the poem is full of the chill and little deaths of autumn.
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I’m not looking forward to the bleakness of winter 🥶
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I like this personification of winter, and I like the fact that you take us indoors to the warmth and the fug of a fire. Your language choices are sorrowful and shivery. Lovely write.
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Thank you Sarah. Winter feels not that far off in Dorset now.
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Winter has a habit of doing that…gave me a chill to read it!
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I’m getting my jumpers out ready!
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I like the repetition and also how you used 3 different prepositions in one line (over, under, along). Beautifully done.
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Thank you 😊
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I absolutely love this! Winter is indeed coal smoky 🙂
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So pleased you liked it 😊
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So much of winter is grey rather than white… and we are getting closer and closer to this… we just have to survive
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Yes, grit our chattering teeth until Spring!
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