
No longer will I be jiggled or sawn.
Don’t furrow your brow as if you don’t understand,
There is no puzzle to be found.
Forget the perfect home,
Shaping me until I fit,
No longer will I be jiggled or sawn.
No eager pieces clattering in the box,
Or spread out on the table, patient for your touch.
Don’t furrow your brow as if you don’t understand.
There’s a new picture now,
A true image that’s whole.
There is no puzzle to be found.
Linking this to the W3 challenge on the Skeptic’s Kaddish and in response to Punam’s invitation to write a cascade poem, on the theme of freedom, and to include some personification. I have to admit I struggled with this – which I feel shows in its reading. It needs more work, but I know if I don’t post it now I will miss the deadline (again).
Marion, that first line of yours in particular is simply ingenious! I love it ❤
~David
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I don’t believe I’ve ever made a serious attempt at a cascade poem. Way too hard. But Ben is right – the first line is great.
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I like using forms, but they don’t always like me! Thank you ,Margaret.
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Yes, it can be over-challenging … till it works.
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Thank you David!
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Marion, in all honesty, I loved your opening stanza! Creativity at its best. ❤️
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Thank you so much Punam!
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Marion,
I just wanna let you guys know that this week’s W3 is now live, and it’s open for new entries until Sunday morning (as usual)!
Much love,
David
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Hi, Marion ❤
I just want to let you know that this week's W3 is now live, and it'll be open until Sunday morning, 10:00 AM (GMT+3).
I hope you can join us this week 🙂
~David
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